Rising, Falling, with each move
Long hair being brushed
I wrote this during class while I sat behind this girl that wouldn't stop brushing her hair. Sorry if it lacks pizzaz.
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- debster
- Lahaina, Maui---Honolulu, Hawaii, Hawaii, United States
- Local Filipina from Lahaina, Maui but currently in DC for graduate school at American University for an MA in Public Anthropology. Try to be involved in the community and try to find harmony and balance with school and personal life. Love family, friends, my soulmate and THE PEOPLE. Want to reach as many goals in life as possible.
2 comments:
very haiku. but better if you use active verb to put in the pizzaz you are looking for. the verb, active as it is, moves the image, the image of and in nature. that is what a haiku-like image is. nice try, with all the empsonian ambiguities (there are 7 types, you know that--or is it more now?)
where is the next haiku coming up?
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